original tune with vocals (please don't laugh)... - Guitars101

**jimihendrix** · 12-29-2004, 09:23 PM

hi there...here's an original tune with vocals...can i get some kind of feedback...thanks - paul

**RobertVanHagar** · 12-29-2004, 09:30 PM

Hey Jimi, good job with the song composition. I could hear a bit of a Zambora feel in the melody.

**jimihendrix** · 12-29-2004, 09:48 PM

thanks alot for the feedback...i wrote this tune at 3 in the morning after doing a lot of soul searching...i got tired of seeing the ex hook up with one man after another...it took it's toll on our two little girls...always seeing guys come and go...i figured that i'd try to reunite the family...i wrote this tune for her to express my hopes of providing the little ones with a stable life...she wasn't interested...oh well...thanks again - paul

**Rid** · 12-29-2004, 11:45 PM

Other than it distorts badly...the tune is cool and does indeed reminds of Richie

**jimihendrix** · 12-30-2004, 06:42 AM

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Originally Posted by Rid

Other than it distorts badly...the tune is cool and does indeed reminds of Richie

thanks for the feedback...i appreciate it...bon jovi tunes are cool...the song was supposed to be light with heavier guitars kicked in...distortion is a part of it...or do you mean the song actually sounds like it was recorded too "hot"...as in i could use a little help in the mixing department?...thanks - paul

**zeppy** · 12-30-2004, 06:50 AM

Very nice composition jimi ! Like this alot but I think they do mean distorted cuz of volume levels . Just a quality issue . other than that is awesome ! I like it alot ! Would be fun to do sum lead 2 . Very catchy tune tho !

**jimihendrix** · 12-30-2004, 07:17 AM

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Originally Posted by zeppy

Very nice composition jimi ! Like this alot but I think they do mean distorted cuz of volume levels . Just a quality issue . other than that is awesome ! I like it alot ! Would be fun to do sum lead 2 . Very catchy tune tho !

thanks zeppy...your comments are appreciated...maybe i should a) learn how to mix properly...b) try to put out some backing tracks...and c) learn how to mix properly haha...thanks again - paul

**ksdb** · 12-30-2004, 07:36 AM

You certainly put your heart and soul in to this and it really shows. Interesting how people get inspired to write the best songs when life presents challenges.There were certainly things about the production that could be refined, but the raw emotion comes through big time and you have a real strong hook in the chorus.

**zeppy** · 12-30-2004, 07:54 AM

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Originally Posted by jimihendrix

thanks zeppy...your comments are appreciated...maybe i should a) learn how to mix properly...b) try to put out some backing tracks...and c) learn how to mix properly haha...thanks again - paul

You'll get it jimi ! Least ya got the most important skill and thats the music !

**jimihendrix** · 12-30-2004, 07:57 AM

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Originally Posted by ksdb

You certainly put your heart and soul in to this and it really shows. Interesting how people get inspired to write the best songs when life presents challenges.There were certainly things about the production that could be refined, but the raw emotion comes through big time and you have a real strong hook in the chorus.

thanks man...i appreciate the comments...i really like the "break the ice" tune you do...it's got a 70's vibe...the singer reminds me of the guy that sings "the wizard" by uriah heep...so..you do all the guitars/bass/drums...me too...i'm a one man band basically...i have to concentrate on the final mix rather than seeing which parts fit together...thanks again - paul