Man there's nothing cheesy at all about that.That was great bro! Well written and arranged and could have easily been a hit song back then! The 80's were a different time and era and I still LOVE that style of music whether its Whitesnake, Iron Maiden
, Priest or even stuff like XYZ, Slaughter, etc............I have an old high school friend and ex-bandmate that would love your song. If you don't mind I'd like to send it to him.