My Entry for Oct.Contest - When I'm Alone

[NewHalen5150]

when I first did this was what won me the contest like 2months ago..and it wasn't even finished..heres a raw demo of finished song..still needs to be RERECORDED for a good demo for a label...me on piano and strings and Megan on singing and making up lyrics [img]images/smilies/icon_cry.gif[/img]

[Scott Parnell]

man this sounds awesome man! wtg! killer tune bro! hope you get this on a label bro and best of luck with it in the future! [img]images/smilies/icon_thumb.gif[/img]

[NewHalen5150]

thanks scott..that means a lot for me..i'm not too sure what to do with the singer tho..she doesn't use like good singing techniques like alot of virbato and dynamics..which is kinda what i swas looking for..and if i bend the whole songs pitch back by like 1 semitone i like the way her voice sounds but not my piano playing..it slows everything down..soo maybe i play regular and find another girl to sing this song..see i can keep the lyrics cause she sent me an email with all the lyrics and put here on my spam list and take full credit for lyrics and find someone else to sing it..[img]images/smilies/icon_thumb.gif[/img]

[Scott Parnell]

wow cool man! well it sure is nice indeed something very different and I enjoyed it.Good Luck to what ever you decide to do on it. So far I like what I hear.

[Stiglar]

i think it sounds pretty good . one thing that sorta gets me though is the way i think you've double tracked the voice in parts ... it sounds kinda weird. sometimes . but it's nice . the other thing i was gonna suggest is work out and make it totally definite where there is going to be the chorus and the verse . if you want the label to pick it up you'll have to have a killer vocal hook in there . without sounding to harsh atm it kinda sounds like one big set of lyrics . pick out a bit you like maybe and use it over and over as a chorus more obviously.

i like though. .i think it sounds good and she aint too bad on the voice just needs some rearranging . some really nice work nh

[siN]

Great to hear this aside from all the guitar violence....

Singing wasn't my favorite, but with a pro-singer this really could be something HOT!

[NewHalen5150]

thats what i'm saying..with a pro singer this song could sell..thank god its copyrighten...i been label searching and its hard tofina a major label that takes demos without knowing someone that works there or in the biz..any hookups or connections anyone?