01-21-2005, 01:51 PM
|
#1
|
|
excess to requirements
Join Date: Jul 2004
Location: Portsmouth, England
Posts: 7,378
|
Here to Save.
I hope no-one minds my doing this. I thought it might be helpful to post the lyrics to my original compositions with a link to the actual song. Anyway this is the latest one I have written and it has been entered (by mickeyg107 - the git!) into the jan comp.
The song was pretty much a spur of the moment thing. I watched the Tsunami disaster on the news and it set off a beatles line "I read the news today oh boy" (A Day In The Life) in my head. Which annoyed me immensely because for the next few days I kept humming the song to myself everytime I saw the disaster on tv. It seemed almost distrespectful.
When I sat down to play I found a lovely guitar line and came up with a basic song structure (despite the beatles playing in my head) and decided to get it recorded. I worked really hard at the backing on this one and as a result the midi drums and bass are by far the best I have created to date. I love the bass solo at the end.
But this forum is about Lyrics and for once I fell short of my expectations. The song lyrics happened really quickly, but they were/are too direct for my liking. I felt they worked, given the context, but they didn't allow me to distance myself from the subject matter. Whilst I like to be objective I really don't like to let my emotions colour things that I have no direct involvement with and this is one of those matters.
The result is a song that could be, KC forgive me, A Rush lyric. Inasmuch that it is factual but based on human emotions. What I wanted was something less direct and defined. I am happy with the words in the way they sit in the tune but I don't like the way they make me feel attached to something I have no right to make commentary about. If that makes sense. 
No points for spotting the Beatles line
Here is the tune http://www.guitars101.com/forums/attachm...chmentid=11780
And here are the Lyrics
HERE TO SAVE
--------------
Can you give me a reason? Can you help me find
A simple explanation On life’s grand designs
I watched the news today – so sad
So many people died
I wanted to turn away – so bad
Instead I just sat and cried
There is no solution.
Yet we still move on
There can be no celebration.
With so many lost and gone
I watched the numbers rise again
All Life just washed away
They said disease is setting in
And left with hell to pay
Can you give me a reason? Can you help me find
A simple explanation On life’s grand designs
The devastation the loss of human life
The realisation that there’s nowhere we can hide
The world keeps spinning turning in its grave
So seize the moment and while the moment is there to save
__________________
"All right, but apart from the sanitation, the medicine, education, wine, public order, irrigation, roads, a fresh water system, and public health, what have the Romans ever done for us?"
|
|
|
|
01-22-2005, 07:02 AM
|
#2
|
|
Goddess of 101
Join Date: Jun 2004
Location: Roaming the streets in the world in my head
Posts: 795
|
very nice! Yes very direct, but very full of emotion right there Goport. I dug it!
__________________
"Sometimes you meet someone and things go great, you have a great relationship. Other times you meet someone and things don't go so great, I call that a realtionshit." Dane Cook
|
|
|
|
|
01-22-2005, 03:25 PM
|
#3
|
|
excess to requirements
Join Date: Jul 2004
Location: Portsmouth, England
Posts: 7,378
|
Thank you young lady, you are too kind.
__________________
"All right, but apart from the sanitation, the medicine, education, wine, public order, irrigation, roads, a fresh water system, and public health, what have the Romans ever done for us?"
|
|
|
|
|
01-22-2005, 04:27 PM
|
#4
|
|
Rebel XTi
Join Date: Mar 2004
Location: South Carolina
Posts: 5,806
|
Hey Goport that was really well put together man!
|
|
|
|
|
01-24-2005, 11:35 AM
|
#5
|
|
excess to requirements
Join Date: Jul 2004
Location: Portsmouth, England
Posts: 7,378
|
Thank you mike - much appreciated mate.
__________________
"All right, but apart from the sanitation, the medicine, education, wine, public order, irrigation, roads, a fresh water system, and public health, what have the Romans ever done for us?"
|
|
|
|
|
01-24-2005, 01:01 PM
|
#6
|
|
101 Guru
Join Date: Jan 2004
Location: somewhere in the USA
Posts: 3,564
|
very nice goport, lots of emotion in this  |
|
|
|
|
01-26-2005, 10:06 AM
|
#7
|
|
excess to requirements
Join Date: Jul 2004
Location: Portsmouth, England
Posts: 7,378
|
Hey thanks wiz!!
__________________
"All right, but apart from the sanitation, the medicine, education, wine, public order, irrigation, roads, a fresh water system, and public health, what have the Romans ever done for us?"
|
|
|
|
|
01-26-2005, 10:13 AM
|
#8
|
|
Da Blooze Guy
Join Date: Dec 2004
Location: Las Vegas
Posts: 6,017
|
Very nice.........very emotional.
|
|
|
|
|
02-23-2005, 11:13 AM
|
#9
|
|
excess to requirements
Join Date: Jul 2004
Location: Portsmouth, England
Posts: 7,378
|
thank you Rythameen
__________________
"All right, but apart from the sanitation, the medicine, education, wine, public order, irrigation, roads, a fresh water system, and public health, what have the Romans ever done for us?"
|
|
|
|
|
03-06-2005, 12:07 PM
|
#10
|
|
Starving Artist
Join Date: Jan 2005
Location: Ontario, Canada
Posts: 6
|
Yes
I've listened to your offerings and have come the conclusion that your very talented, indeed. Versatility is the name of the game. You seem to ooze it, imo.
__________________
Get it into ya. :wtf:
|
|
|
|
|
03-06-2005, 12:10 PM
|
#11
|
|
Starving Artist
Join Date: Jan 2005
Location: Ontario, Canada
Posts: 6
|
Great lyrics, btw.
__________________
Get it into ya. :wtf:
|
|
|
|
|
03-06-2005, 04:45 PM
|
#12
|
|
~Free Will~
Join Date: Apr 2004
Location: Lost in your eyes...
Posts: 6,509
|
Very deep and emotional indeed...this touched me very much so...Excellent Porty...
__________________
~ A man's got to believe in something. I believe I'll have another drink~
|
|
|
|
|
03-07-2005, 08:39 PM
|
#13
|
|
I am a meat popsicle
Join Date: Feb 2004
Location: New Orleans, LA
Posts: 4,857
|
Porty...you are a genius man!! Incredable talent you have. 
__________________
"O Lord bless this thy hand grenade that with it thou mayest blow thine enemies to tiny bits, in thy mercy."
|
|
|
|
|
03-09-2005, 05:34 PM
|
#14
|
|
Famous Artist
Join Date: Dec 2004
Posts: 224
|
Here To Save
Gotta be honest with you because thats what I do.
You have some good thoughts to your lyrics but its too predictable on what you're going to say next. Not really cliques but predictable.I think most of us can be guilty of the same thing. I think that you should have put more thought in to it and be a bit more abstract
|
|
|
|
|
03-10-2005, 10:41 AM
|
#15
|
|
Arena Artist
Join Date: Jun 2004
Location: Chicago Ill.
Posts: 538
|
Very good job on lyrics and the tune. Sad indeed.  |
|
|
|
|
|
Linear Mode
