12-23-2004, 04:03 AM
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What planet are you on ? mondola
What planet are you on now baby,
Is it Mercury or Venus ?
If I could reach into your world
Maybe there'd be something between us ?
Do you surf the rings of Saturn ?
Do you constellate the stars ?
Or are you too far out on Pluto baby
To meet me here on Mars ?
Last edited by mondola; 02-13-2005 at 12:44 PM.
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12-23-2004, 04:10 AM
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hey thats pretty cool mate. I am just glad you didn't go looking for a rhyme for uranus 
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12-23-2004, 04:31 AM
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Well, I had another line with Orange, and amother with Sax-o-mo-phone in it. So I ended up ditching it and just sticking with the chorus !!!
Thanx for taking the time to read it...
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01-21-2005, 01:28 PM
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err, can someone tell me why people are deleting perfectly good lyrics? Mondola - I liked this and the construction of it. My lyrics are far less focused and you did a good job here and kept to your subject matter. I respect that. repost.
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"All right, but apart from the sanitation, the medicine, education, wine, public order, irrigation, roads, a fresh water system, and public health, what have the Romans ever done for us?"
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02-13-2005, 12:32 PM
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Sorry, you know how fucking touchy I am man, and I take things so bloody personally !
I just pulled it because I thought it was shit !!!
I will repost then
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02-15-2005, 04:10 AM
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I really like this! I can imagine it being a spoken word passage in a Hendrix/early Bowie wierd out moment. Thanks for putting it up. 
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"All right, but apart from the sanitation, the medicine, education, wine, public order, irrigation, roads, a fresh water system, and public health, what have the Romans ever done for us?"
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02-15-2005, 04:13 AM
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Originally Posted by Goport
I really like this! I can imagine it being a spoken word passage in a Hendrix/early Bowie wierd out moment. Thanks for putting it up. |
I could imagine it as a Punk Rock song |
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02-15-2005, 04:26 AM
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Originally Posted by GuitarPlayingPJ
I could imagine it as a Punk Rock song |
Spooky, PJ, because the guitar sound I can hear behind these lyrics has a grundgy sound to it. Then when this "chorus" has been sang, it would go into full on grundge mode.
Great minds and all that, eh ?
It's just a snippet of an idea that's always niggled at the back of my mind that I've never been able to grasp hold of firmly enough to bring into fruition, but there's a definite grundge vibe going on !
Porty, I can't imagine it as a spoken passage, but that's probably because I'm blinkered by all this bloody grundgy niggling that's going on in the back of mind !
"Oi ! Keep it down back there !!!!"
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02-15-2005, 04:29 AM
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Originally Posted by mondola
Spooky, PJ, because the guitar sound I can hear behind these lyrics has a grundgy sound to it.
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02-15-2005, 10:07 AM
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great lyrics Mondo Record this it would be cool! |
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02-15-2005, 12:23 PM
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Mate, if that fuzzy riff in the back of my head would stay around long enough for me to pull to the front of my consciousness, then I would do ! But everytime I grasp for it, it just disappears !
Plus, I can't get further than this, so I can't just sing this chorus over and over again can I ?
I need to spend a beer / whiskey / or something else influenced evening to see if I can break down those doubts that inhibit my creativity and see if I could actually finish this...
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02-16-2005, 06:29 PM
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Short and sweet....Loved it Mondy..
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