[Paper Bag]

Edit: Updated with file in 5th post.

 

[Mr. Pod]

Nice tune man:thumb: .Has feeling to it.

 

[Rythameen]

It's got a nice feel to it, I for one would like to hear you carry this further, and post the results here.:icon_thum

 

[Paper Bag]

Thank you both.

Work in progress it is, then. =P

 

[Paper Bag]

Ok after a year and a couple of months I've finally managed to get back into working on this one. It's now finished ... complete with lyrics ... but I've only recorded the guitar part for now. My first song. Feels nice to finish one.

I've not been an active poster in this section of the board, and am aware that such activity would increase my chance of receiving comments. In any case, for those of you who check out the file, comments are welcomed and appreciated.

I hope you like it.

 

[keihan]

Very cool tune you have here.. the finger picking outro was a very nice touch :thumb:

I'm with Rythameen that I would love to hear you take this one even further and expand on it.

I do the same with all of my original tunes. They are always in an eternal state of evolution LOL! So, if I ever say that I have finished a tune, you know I'm lying LOL!

 

[Paper Bag]

haha yeh ... I know what it's like for them to be constantly evolving ... this is the first I've had in a state where I feel ok with calling it complete. I actually have lyrics, and I think with the lyrics it works a bit better as a song than just as the guitar ... however I'm not against working on it more. =D

I'm happy with the outro, too. Not sure how I came up with it. I came up with a few of the parts two nights ago after more than a year of no ideas.

I'll see what else I can do with it. Thanks for the comment!

 

[nandk]

This is a great 1st original! keep on pickin!

 

[Paper Bag]

Thank you very much. I will.

Got a bunch of incompletes floating around and being fiddled with whenever I pick up the guitar (every day). Fun watching (listening to) myself because I'm so new to this and don't know what to expect from myself as a songwriter.

 

[Naifuzan]

I find it really hard to make any comments about this, as its just kind of background stuff... But i bet it's a great song with vocals and all.

 

[Paper Bag]

hehe fair enough ... I can accept that. Thanks for listening.

 

[Paper Bag]

Thanks for the comments ... I'm removing the file now.